Q: People attend college or university for many
different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation,
increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use
specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.
People attend
college mainly for education in career preparation. College or University
offers a wide range of practical knowledge along with career preparation. In
India students attend college to complete their studies and can then apply for
a job.
The
main reason for people attending college or university is academic education.
College and university offer the best preparation for building a career. In
India, like everywhere else in the world, students attend these institutions to
gain practical knowledge so that they can later apply for a job and learn their
living respectably.
Normally
students attend a four year college or university as part of their completion
of studies. The better they perform, the better they earn later at their
placements. [Repetition, and obvious] The main
focus for middle class students is gaining knowledge while completing their
studies, to earn better at their placements. New experience is an add on to
their primary focus. The Indian culture [portrays
the desire to money=their burning determination
for luxury] etc.
For
the lower and middle classes, education is the main ladder that will take them
out of the poverty trap. One’s origin is not a choice, but education, to a good
extent, does provide the opportunity to choose one’s future. Indian culture
portrays an intense desire for even in a world that is becoming more and more
immaterial, the material still prevails.
Besides,
in a competitive world like ours, ignorance has almost become a stigma. People
are no longer judged by the colour of their skin, or their eyes, or their hair,
or their family name but instead, on the power of their brains. They are in
constant search of their real worth. Success without significance remains
incomplete: everyone wants to be respected and valued during his lifetime, and
remembered after his death. Education not only provides the knowledge necessary
to achieve success, but it also creates the desire to stand out from the crowd.
New experiences
would boost them up for their future. The gain in experience can be justified
as a tool for students when they are exposed to adverse situations, but is not
the true purpose for students attending college or university. This has been
averred by surveys and research conducted by organizations. Recent Times of
India survey states that students attended engineering colleges even while they
wished to pursue education in economics. They intended to do an MBA from the
top colleges but were pushed to engineering by their parents. Will their
experience gain them even a buck? Can they prove themselves in their
non-intended field of study? The answer is of course a “NO”. New experience
would not be the student’s main focus.
Why is
the answer ‘no’? You can learn things even when you don’t want to learn them,
simply because you are being pushed to. This is only in the movie ‘3 idiots’.
Not always true that.
Even
if for some people education provides scope for new experiences in life, there
are still some unfortunate ones who do not get to pursue the path they wish to
tread one. Surveys and research conducted provide evidence to this. Recent
Times of India survey states that students attended engineering colleges while
they wished to pursue education in economics. They intended to do an MBA from
the top colleges but were pushed to engineering by their parents. In such
cases, experiences can become haunting—with the uncomfortable feeling that one
did not achieve what one wanted to.
I am
not sure about this para… still don’t get why you included it.
Increased
knowledge is a factor which is to be considered extensively. We start the
process of learning at an early age; [you are
explaining further the point mentioned] it is continued in college after
being initiated by school. Students have been gaining
knowledge since they became students and so they do not view it as an aspect
for university or college. (?) Knowledge can also be gained by
experience but it would normally take longer than expected. It resembles the
situation as a student already possessing a laptop would not be that curious
about electrical equipment as a student who does not have it.
I
already talked about knowledge in the third paragraph I wrote.
Students mainly
attend college or university for career preparation rather than any other
aspect to be imagined by them.
You
need more research, add some quotes too. What about stigmas that exist in
society? The pariahs? Do some research. You are merely elaborating the reasons
given above. Am sure there are many other reasons. Remember that if your
opinion is a repetition of what has already been mentioned in the question,
people wouldn’t be interested in listening to you.
And as
a side comment. Your last line. The final impact you leave on readers will
depend on what your last line is.
College
and university have almost become part of the natural course of life of people,
and maybe, that is they are taken for granted by many. If only for one day, all
universities and colleges could be taken off the world, perhaps then, people
would realize the real importance of education, and the arduous labour our
ancestors went through to provide us with materials from which to learn. And
perhaps, they would realize the need to change from rote learning parrots to people
of significance.
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